You haven't proof-read the piece at all.

The Man stood at the edge of his land, a barren grassland, where few trees grew and food was not easy to come by.sandyqbg

The repetition of "land" doesn't sound good. Read it out to yourself; it sounds rather odd. Try a different word or re-word the sentence. 

On the other side of the Great River, he saw a green patch through his sights.sandyqbg

He's already seeing it, it's obvious that it's "through his sights". No need to reiterate that so immediately. 

compared to the dryland he had departed from, there were more trees and more food, compared to the dryland he had departed from.sandyqbg

Maybe you just missed that. 

He reached the traversed the breadth of the landsandyqbg

Probably a typo here. Doesn't make sense...

He wanted more - Something he could take back to his village and live happily ever after; Something that would buy him everything that he could ever desire;sandyqbg

I don't think you have to capitalise the words after punctuation that is not a full-stop, and question-marks or exclamation-marks in some cases. Semi-colons don't count, I don't think, and neither do dashes. 

I think the others have already been addressed. I just thought that the last sentence didn't fit very well. I didn't feel a sense of finality when I read it. Otherwise, though, the story's pretty good. But maybe you could explain his village? It just popped out of the blue. Where is it? Why isn't he back there?

Not quite sure I understood the assignment, but I'll

Sega is going to fall. When Super Soinc Racing becomes an epic phail, Sonic fans can't take any more crap from them, and they will get really furious. Thus they will form a group calling themselves "the dark brotherhood," and they will kidnap everyone that works for Sega, force them to walk on a trail og hedgehogs and burn them the way witches were burned during the 1600s.

waZelda

Nice one! You really hate Sega that much...?

Urggg... Writing... getting worse... Hard to keep... reading...

But... Must critique... Must... must finish... Lame writing... must critique!!iloveflash

I can't believe... you actually... bowed to Foolz3h's request...!

Sorry, I'm a day late.

Challenge for 28th June 2009: The economic recession is fast affecting the whole world! There MUST be some game companies that have to fall... how about... your most hated video game company? Write a paragraph on which company you wish to fall with the absurdest reason that you can come up with!

I like the content, and also the mood. It's simple, but I like the imagery that you put together.

I think you're missing something in this sentence, though: 

The woman interrupted to tattoo of the soft rain on the windshield.bluej33

I didn't understand it. Otherwise, nice one! :)