Here are some more of my lyrics (or is it a poem?). Let's pretend that they make perfect sense... ach, I haven't written something that abstract in a while.
Kinda sloppy and confusing. You've had much better. Don't try to make the lyrics/poetry. Let the poetry/lyrics come to you. Then you truly have something.
I think this is one of my favourites, actually. I really enjoy it except for the final paragraph, but it feels much less like it needs music compared to some of the other ones. It would go great with a passionate speaker and some backing music, though! :P
Kinda sloppy and confusing. You've had much better. Don't try to make the lyrics/poetry. Let the poetry/lyrics come to you. Then you truly have something.mprezzy
I think that that's how I wrote it. Every time I write I try to imagine a scene and some words and phrases just come to me from that.
I think this is one of my favourites, actually. I really enjoy it except for the final paragraph, but it feels much less like it needs music compared to some of the other ones. It would go great with a passionate speaker and some backing music, though! :PFoolz3h
One thing that I did with this one was take any typical lines and re-interpret them as something else. It's also one of my favourites and it would be very fitting if placed amongst the right company (of songs).
Definitely not one of your better poems, kingkilla! I thought it was, overall, quite bland, and to quote another member on a similar piece: "It didn't do anything for me." The rhyme scheme doesn't go anywhere, and the message of the piece is quite obscure, and not in a good way. Abstract? Yeah. Airborne? Notsomuch.
You and I need to go to a bar and get wasted sometime--we've really hit the can.
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