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#1 Rookie395
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Sorry Steven. Your late to the party:Phonkyjoe


But you're just in time for cleaning up!
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I think the problem is that 'burn' sounds like the forced rythme.
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Overall, it was a good poem. I think you should write more. I only have one complaint,

Then you will burnThe Poem


This line appears at the end of the first stanza and it seems so out of place. You have a rythmic flow leading up to that line and then you break it, then continue it again in the second stanza. That line seems so out of place as it if were a forced rythme. You should look at rewording it.

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Did'nt we already have a thread like this?optiow

We had an off-topic and an intro thread -- now they disappeared and this came about

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#5 Rookie395
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A very nice list of games to say the very least. A very good Game of the Year post, it was pretty-well written. As for the actual content, I loved your created awards - espessially Best Theme Song. Looking forward to next years .. or midyear awards ;) hint hint, nudge nudge :)
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Good morning gentlemen. I hope I am not interupting your little tea party, but we have work to do. Who am I? Well if you must know I am the fierest of my kind, an expert swordsman capable of killing anything with a single shot. And I always get the job done. They call me Alabath, Alabath the Lyzerd.

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#9 Rookie395
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For The Time Being is a great poem. I really liked it espessially the firstĀ  and second stanzas. I only have one complaint and it is nitpicking so don't worry too much about it ...

... to steep, one ...honkyjoe


Actually I have two issues. Firstly, it is too steep not to steep (you forgot the extra o)

Secondly, this is the only time that you punctuate your entire piece. You should either punctuate the whole thing or not at all - it is about being consistenant. That is juts what I have always learned, been told and believed - take it in whatever way you want to.

But I digress, it was a fantastic piece that I really enjoyed.

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#10 Rookie395
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Read the POP and recommended it a day or two ago - never commented. Anyway, I enjoyed most of it. It seemed too conversational for my tastes, but you were straight and to the point so I cannot fault you on that one. I recently got the game for a couple bucks on PS2 so I am interested on seeing what I think of it and how it compares to the PC version.