I have always tried to avoid the unneccessary spacing in order to make chapters as condensed as possible, so they will be a quicker read. But I suppose moving lines such as that down wouldn't hurt...having written a few chapters with the same system however, I hesitate to change it mid-book, you know?

And remember, this was just the intro, lol. Much like the last book, it could be discarded and the main story would not suffer much from it at all. I felt it was important to do something to draw the reader right in, and the action sequence fit the bill nicely. Thanks for reading btw. :)

"Arturo looked up and took hold of the phone-he wasn't going to lose another one. He looked at each of the ashen faces of his bridge crew and he said into the receiver, 'Come on home, kid. It's time to go.'"

^I've read up to that point there as of now. The action definitely picked up as you said, lol. I don't have much to comment...even though all the switching of viewpoints and character names and dialogue are a bit confusing, it does little to deter from enjoying the combat and hecticness of the situation. The only error I found was a simple misspelling of "maneuver" btw, so props for writing well. ;)

Yeah, I'll start posting in your topic regarding Nostos. And I agree, it's generally better to leave out dialogue tags when possible if you want a rapid-fire effect in the conversations, but you just have to make sure that when three or more people are talking, things can't be easily jumbled up.

As for SoB2...since these chapters are shorter than before, I definitely want to wait until I have them all written before I upload them. I wouldn't want people to read through them faster than I can write the rest. :P However, I suppose I can upload the intro, just to tease the daylights out of you, lol:

Shadows of Bara 2 - Intro

Alright, well, I've read a decent bit to start. Thanks for making the PG-13 version by the way, it's a heck of an easier read, lol. I stopped at this point today:

"Passed by Aden a little earlier," Reardon replied. "He was taking his bird out for a spin. Signed out something like thirty minutes ago."

The two continued to watch the fighters circle each other, performing near death-defying stunts. Reardon snorted, "Flyboys."

It's not even close to halfway, but so far, I'm very intrigued. As I said before you have a very good skill at making the reader feel engaged in whatever is going on, even if they don't understand it yet. The characters themselves are also interesting, and my only issue was that I had some minor trouble in trying to figure out who was speaking at some points in the dialogue, which resulted in me having to go back and re-read a paragraph to make sure that I grasped it fully.

That's certainly better, yes, lol. I'll hopefully get to check it out tomorrow as it's already past 1 AM at the moment where I live.

I also just finished the first chapter of SoB2. I'm pretty much winging it, but hey, it worked when I was writing the first book. :P

I've written out a rough introduction for the next entry into the series, if it were to be a sequel, just because an inspiration of sorts hit me and I decided to type it up before I forgot it, lol. I'll take what you said into consideration when I write the story, or if I even do.

And I actually started reading your work a bit ago. I was immediately turned away by the amount of course language, to tell the truth. I'm honestly used to looking over such things in favor of a good story, and if the cursing fits the dialogue and/or characters' attitudes, then it's understandable. It's not my type of book though, when the cursing is in every other line. I apologize that I couldn't be of more help, lol. From what I did read, I gathered that you have a very good ability to set a mood; I found myself pretty well sucked into the drama unfolding at hand.

"Personally, I want the hunt for Weskav (who has most certainly gone to seek help *wink*)."

Certainly an option, but, the question remains as to what timeline I should use. I could wait until our former protagonists have grown up significantly, which would make Weskav quite a bit older as well, or I could begin the sequel in the period right after the original ending of SoB.

"If you had to make a prequel, Borlen and Delhan or nothing."

That was my plan. The idea of a prequel concerning them seemed more intriguing and open for creativity than a sequel. It would also offer a bigger opportunity to expand on the clans themselves.