I'm so so sorry for being such a stubborn little brat. Sometimes I get very down in the dumps and I'm always negative. I hope that nobody took it personal and I'm sorry if I made anyone feel bad. :(lexika

I am a bit of a pessimist myself. People with a negative outlook tend to be very cynical and when their skeptical nature begins to question themselves the results can be very damaging. I am happy to see that your spirits have brightened though.

I just finished reading chapter 5 and I sense a shift in where the story is going as far as the flashbacks are concerned. The hostility of the kids in the chapter is somewhat surreal, but also necessary for evidence of revenge taking place in a later chapter. This is just my prediction though. At the end of the chapter when the two pulled out the magazine I had thought that their advantage was the ability to read before their intentions were revealed.

The only advise I could give is to treat every chapter as if it were the climax. The second chapter really initiated the rise in action during the third chapter. Although the reveal was easily anticipated you can still personalize this immortality concept to your liking. So I agree with wazelda's above statement that this plotline is acceptable as long as you make it your own story. You may have hit a rough patch of sorts but by all means continue your efforts. If you possesed the courage to begin this tale at least follow through for your sake if nothing else.