I think the other thread is not needed now that I have figured out which story I want to focus on, which is the rehab for the dead story I wrote about in the other thread. I really appreciate all the help you guys gave me on the other story and I have written it all down, but I think I want to focus on this idea for now. The other important thread was getting too long and it wasn't focused on what I wanted it to focus on. So here I will post an update of the story so far for those who didn't read the other thread, and overall i think gathering all the info here is better than having it spread across several pages don't you? Anyway here is the main story so far, feel free to comment and post ideas. I would love to see them:)
A young girl around 12 or so is in a public bathroom when she see's the bathroom door bang open and 2 boys enter, one older boy dragging a younger one to a stall. They start fighting in the stall and she hears the young boy scream, She tries to help, but gets there too late. The young boy is already badly injured and after her encounter with the older boy she manages to injure him but is also very badly injured too. After a while she slumps in a corner and her vision goes black. She wakes up in a snowy forest and no memory of anything except her own death. As she wanders through the forest she finds the 2 boys from the bathroom walking in a daze like her. They all start to explore the forest when they come across a bunch of kids outside a building. This is the rehab center for the dead, where people or in this case kids go after they die if they have done enough bad deeds in their life. Everyone loses their memory when they arrive, and the whole idea of this place is that each kid goes through various treatments like reinacting their own deaths to try and find alternatives to what they did. Eventually as the film goes on you find out more about the 3 main characters and why they ended up in the bathroom and why they all killed each other.
For those from the other important thread notice how it is 3 main characters now and not 4, I thought that 4 was a bit much. 3 is more of a good balence, also saves me writing too much. I want this story to be about characters who are not good people, but they are likeable and come from a sympathetic and tragic background. Their backstory and how it gets discovered at the rehab center ia vital to the story. Also some of you may remember the depressing ending I posted where the girl dies in the rehab place and wakes up in a coffin, one person said that making her a ghost would be creepy. I don't think that would work, I think I have put enough suffering on these characters and I think having there be some kind of ending that has a bit of hope should be important. However if you have an idea for an ending that is sadder then go ahead and post it. Anyway, the new ending is the young boy and girl run away from the rehab grounds and find a group of kids who did the same thing because they didn't want to remember their bad past. The 2 main kids are interested, but the boy gets scared and leaves while the girl stays to talk to the kids. The boy leaves because the only way he and her could live with the other kids is for them to die at the rehab place and he is too scared to do that. Later though he gets worried when the girl doesnt arrive back, eventually though she comes from the forest and he is glad to see her. When he calls her name she doesnt even remember him, and when he realizes what she did and why she has no memory he is at first shocked. He then asks her if she wants to go somewhere he thinks she would like. She says yes and follows him to the place where the kids with no memories live.
See I can do happy endings when I want to:D Go ahead and tell me what you think of this new story update.
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