Too short, too cliché (as a story), makes me think of a single episode of some of those teenagers t.v shows...
Anyway, not bad, I understand that the experience could be seen as original, but seriously, not 9.5, not 9... what are you talking about?
This makes me believe that critics in this industry are deeply bored and deeply desperate of anything new... since the industry is comporting itself a little bit like the movie industry lately...