I wrote a poem about Halo - Whaddya think?

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#1 Posted by Supaman222 (257 posts) -

First off, this is a serious poem I intend to submit for my english class. It was a good source of inspiration. I also think it's pretty subtle or else I wouldn't submit it.

Dominance


We meet together at a crossroad,

Only one will walk away.

'Tis I who will be the one

To see the light of day.


We battle 'til we hear the click

in a panic, rush forward for the kill

I slip away, victorious,

only feeling slightly ill.


Don't be ashamed,

although you're maimed

your life is far from lost,

waiting a few seconds,

is quite a fair cost.


We meet together at a crossroad,

Only one will walk away.

'Tis I who will be the one,

To see the light of day.

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#2 Posted by needled24-7 (15902 posts) -

a single tear just slid down my cheek

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#3 Posted by wired4stuff (182 posts) -
pretty lame. hopefully you don't have to read it in front of the class, they'll all laugh at you. and it is in no way subtle.
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#4 Posted by MasterBolt360 (5293 posts) -

Very nice, but did it have to be about Halo? :lol:

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#5 Posted by Stevo7991 (1319 posts) -

Nice poem....:roll:

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#6 Posted by Fusionmix (1656 posts) -

Dude. A poem about a video game?

It's trite, your rhymes are hilarious (ill? maimin? What?), and the whole thing is melodramatic. No. Please do not read it in front of class, or Billie Mays' ghost will confiscate your mancard.

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#7 Posted by Rhino53 (2551 posts) -

Poetry in the Gamespot forums? now I've seen everything...

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#8 Posted by sundown19 (419 posts) -

If you change the title to "Molested" it puts the poem in a whole new context.

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#9 Posted by Venomkringe (168 posts) -

lol its not as bad as one of my friends who wrote a series of lyrics all about halo, i couldn't look at him seriously for a whole month XD

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#10 Posted by Supaman222 (257 posts) -

You laugh, but I got 10/10. My teacher is an idiot.

But so am I.

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#11 Posted by supersas12 (25 posts) -
on a video game lol
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#12 Posted by BLAS1AN (3500 posts) -

sounds like last saturdays UFC match between Brock Lesnar and Cain, lol

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#13 Posted by Keving7 (1028 posts) -

Poetry in the Gamespot forums? now I've seen everything...

Rhino53
my thoughts exactly hahahaha. TC, i guess good job? Please record a video of you reciting this in a matchmaking lobby. I wanna see what happens so bad lol
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#14 Posted by Keving7 (1028 posts) -

If you change the title to "Molested" it puts the poem in a whole new context.

sundown19
HAHA that is TERRIBLE...YET HILARIOUS (yes this is all CAPS worthy)
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#15 Posted by DJ_Magneto (4675 posts) -

You laugh, but I got 10/10. My teacher is an idiot.

But so am I.

Supaman222
Hey, as long as you gave an effort, a poetry teacher can't really give you crap. Speaking of poetry in games, maybe you'll like this... Gears 2: Rendezvous The whole poem here...Alan Seeger was a WWI vet, so I think he has good context for this poem. I have a Rendezvous with Death by Alan Seeger
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#16 Posted by Ghost_702 (7405 posts) -
Don't call yourself an idiot just because others on the forum think you are. Is their poetry supposed to be any better than yours? It was good man. If you understand Halo and respawns, it makes sense and is actually very good in that the poem can be continuously repeated. You fight, you die, you come back. You may not win a nobel prize for it, but it is by no means terrible. Also, what's wrong with writing about Halo? You should write about what you know and enjoy.
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#17 Posted by The_Shady_One (25 posts) -
A poem about Halo... I bet Edgar Allen Poe is spinning in his grave right now.
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#18 Posted by the__joker (6013 posts) -

Poetry in the Gamespot forums? now I've seen everything...

Rhino53

Or have you?

....

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#19 Posted by erickb1983 (315 posts) -

Stick to game playing as your hobby not poem writing. I am curious to what grade you got for it.

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#20 Posted by wwervin (10273 posts) -
Bet ya didn't know poems don't have to rhyme. I'd suggest going that route next time, your rhymes were rather odd. Good job though. Hope you didn't look like a tool reading it in front of class lol.
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#21 Posted by BLAS1AN (3500 posts) -

Bet ya didn't know poems don't have to rhyme. I'd suggest going that route next time, your rhymes were rather odd. Good job though. Hope you didn't look like a tool reading it in front of class lol.wwervin

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#22 Posted by DJ_Magneto (4675 posts) -
@BLAS1AN Awesome costume. Is that a Halo 3 Legendary Edition helmet on that kid's head?
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#23 Posted by BLAS1AN (3500 posts) -

@DJ_Magneto

that does look like it. I need to see if my son can fit it and wear for halloween :P

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#24 Posted by Overlord93 (12602 posts) -

you missed the bit were you dunk your nuts in the other players face

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#25 Posted by Black_Knight_00 (20975 posts) -
Spartans get ill after a fight? Nice effort by the way
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#26 Posted by Assassin_73 (165 posts) -
maybe it would be nice to enter it as your sig.
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#27 Posted by DamianAlexander (3762 posts) -

I'm speechless... That was horrible...

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#28 Posted by Saberhearts (128 posts) -

Its good. but your clasmates WILL Take the piss. Also i dont like cheesy poems. Thats me though. Other people seem to like it

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#29 Posted by Wakanoid (4468 posts) -
You got a 10/10? What grade/level are you?
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#30 Posted by Wings_008 (3813 posts) -
lol i like it, it's pretty decent i must say
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#31 Posted by Gruntface (25 posts) -
It's awright... here's one I just thought up while thinking about "the halo players best friend" (lol not!) based of the old "Roses are Red" poem "Health bar is red, Plasma is blue. Dem suicide grunts...be a follown' you" yes I know it's dumb...look how much I care----> 000
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#32 Posted by Apocalypse324 (1486 posts) -

It's awright... here's one I just thought up while thinking about "the halo players best friend" (lol not!) based of the old "Roses are Red" poem "Health bar is red, Plasma is blue. Dem suicide grunts...be a follown' you" yes I know it's dumb...look how much I care----> 000Gruntface
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