@The_Last_Ride: The biggest problem I have with it is the lack of proof reading. Typos everywhere, and the occasional odd syntax. I find it helps to write it out in a word processor, then port it over to Gamespot's rather lacking tools. Helps catch typos. Also try reading it aloud, to catch any odd phrasing.
Secondly, it just kind of jumps right in without much of an introduction. You also have next to no outro either. At least to me, it seems abrupt and future reviews might benefit from spending more time on those. As for what a good intro or outro looks like for a sports game, I'm not really the guy to ask. I just think it would benefit from a clear beginning, middle and end.
Next, expand on your points. The reader craves exposition in a review. It's rarely enough to say that something works, or "The gameplay feels good". Why is the gameplay good? What made it better than the last one? It's much better to see "Thanks to A,B and C, the gameplay has a great feel to it and the game is a joy to control".
Lastly, I don't feel you did this, but personally, I rarely feel like visuals are worth more than a footnote, unless they are eye-bleedingly bad. I'll usually lump them in with music and any other presentation stuff near the end, which I think you did well.
Decent overall. Has it's issues, but nothing you couldn't iron out in future work.
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