I'm a huge rap fan and I don't want to be an ass, I want to give some genuine criticism which may or may not help you improve. I didn't like it.
4. things were wrong for me personally.
1. Deliverance. I found it to be too slow, which isn't a bad thing, but your voice didn't really do anything creative. It was the same tone pattern over and over every line, which made your slow deliverance sound as bland as hell. I don't know whether it's just my personal taste, I like more agressive and precision deliverance vocally.
2. Theme. This is something that i guess I can't really tell you to change, but I think that taking yourself seriously when rapping about video games is really lame. It makes you look like a poser. If you gave it some more flare and humour, and used your voice to make this lack of seriousness obvious, it wouldn't look anywhere near as silly.
3. The beat. I really think you need to consider the music you rap to far more seriously. This particular background music, Halo, just doesn't really go well with rap, sorry.
4. Lyrics. This was the worst for me out of what I had to complain about. To me, and many other rap fans (The ones who like real rap anyway) want to hear stories about people's lives, and cold hard facts of life that make you think. I found myself rolling my eyes just listening to your lyrics, without even taking into account the other aspects. All I heard was 'Yeah I'm the best, I'm taking this into lockdown, I like to inflate my ego etc.'. Again, this could be taste. Maybe you listen to all this new crap like Lil Wayne and Soulja Boy, where the lyrics are just garbage. Me, I like KRS-One, N.W.A. and all that, where lyrics are the top priority.
Now, don't listen to all these people saying that rap is bad and all that, they either don't understand what true rap is, or they just don't like it, so forget them. As someone who likes rap, I'm telling you that it wasn't very good, and as harsh as it feels to say it, it was fake.
Sorry man :(.
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