Can I get your input on something?

What do you think of this? It's a song I wrote, and my first song that I now show to the world. I have many more that I wrote. If people like this, I'll record the other ones, too.

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TBH...I actually really like it.

I'm not a metal fan. As a guitarist who writes his own stuff as well I won't dump on you. The only thing I really see missing in the song is a part for lyrics. There seems to be too much going on to ever sing over. Then again, I'm no metal fan. The band I can play almost every song from is Pink Floyd. About 15 years and counting of learning that stuff.

I'm not a metal fan. As a guitarist who writes his own stuff as well I won't dump on you. The only thing I really see missing in the song is a part for lyrics. There seems to be too much going on to ever sing over. Then again, I'm no metal fan. The band I can play almost every song from is Pink Floyd. About 15 years and counting of learning that stuff.

Mikey132

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I'm not a metal fan. As a guitarist who writes his own stuff as well I won't dump on you. The only thing I really see missing in the song is a part for lyrics. There seems to be too much going on to ever sing over. Then again, I'm no metal fan. The band I can play almost every song from is Pink Floyd. About 15 years and counting of learning that stuff.

ColdExistence

That's where I have a problem too. Even just my guitar and I, I find vocals frustrating as hell. If from this point you start to think about and incorporate vocals the song could be good. In honesty, it sounds like instruments making up for the lack of vocals.

It reminds me a lot of Trans Siberian Orchestra, as well as Metallica's Orchestral album. Franklinstein

Which means that I really really like it! You should blog about your process as well as providing more links to other songs.

[QUOTE="ColdExistence"]

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

I'm not a metal fan. As a guitarist who writes his own stuff as well I won't dump on you. The only thing I really see missing in the song is a part for lyrics. There seems to be too much going on to ever sing over. Then again, I'm no metal fan. The band I can play almost every song from is Pink Floyd. About 15 years and counting of learning that stuff.

Mikey132

That's where I have a problem too. Even just my guitar and I, I find vocals frustrating as hell. If from this point you start to think about and incorporate vocals the song could be good. In honesty, it sounds like instruments making up for the lack of vocals.

I voted No, but only because you put 4 yes's, and only one no.... My serious input for your music, though, is this: It reminds me a lot of Trans Siberian Orchestra, as well as Metallica's Orchestral album. I have a question, did you actually play any of the instruments here? Or did you use some sort of mixing program to put samples and what not together?Franklinstein

[QUOTE="Franklinstein"]It reminds me a lot of Trans Siberian Orchestra, as well as Metallica's Orchestral album. Synthia

Which means that I really really like it! You should blog about your process as well as providing more links to other songs.

[QUOTE="Franklinstein"]I voted No, but only because you put 4 yes's, and only one no.... My serious input for your music, though, is this: It reminds me a lot of Trans Siberian Orchestra, as well as Metallica's Orchestral album. I have a question, did you actually play any of the instruments here? Or did you use some sort of mixing program to put samples and what not together?ColdExistence

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

[QUOTE="ColdExistence"]I wouldn't say there's much going on compared to many other Metal bands, and those bands even manage to lay down vocals on their stuff. I don't know about doing vocals or lyrics. I find it frustrating. If I can find someone who's willing to record vocals for me, I might try it.

Franklinstein

That's where I have a problem too. Even just my guitar and I, I find vocals frustrating as hell. If from this point you start to think about and incorporate vocals the song could be good. In honesty, it sounds like instruments making up for the lack of vocals.

I can sing Money, Mother, Wish you were here, plus other Floyd songs. For me I think the hardest obstacle to pass is having what you write being rejected. It's like I count myself out before the game ever begins.

[QUOTE="Franklinstein"][QUOTE="Mikey132"]

That's where I have a problem too. Even just my guitar and I, I find vocals frustrating as hell. If from this point you start to think about and incorporate vocals the song could be good. In honesty, it sounds like instruments making up for the lack of vocals.

Mikey132

I can sing Money, Mother, Wish you were here, plus other Floyd songs. For me I think the hardest obstacle to pass is having what you write being rejected. It's like I count myself out before the game ever begins.

Unfortunately the only cure for that is to just do it. Not that your asking for this advice, but the way I got over that is by telling myself that my material is much better than some of the stuff that people aren't afraid to put on the radio, like "Three Days Grace" and "Hinder"

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

Mikey132

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

ColdExistence

It's not bad, it isn't. Now you should find someone who can sing.

[QUOTE="ColdExistence"]

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

Franklinstein

Want to hear a good story, too bad if answer is no, I'm typing it. I started to play when I was 13. My older brother who was 2 years older than me played in more than 1 band, (lol, I just found out at Christmas he played in a Faith No More tribute band.... shocking, I know)

Anyways in my teenage years I said to him one night "you know there's brothers in Collective Soul?" (at that time I was really looking forward to playing in a band) He said "Do you want to know why that will never happen?" The rest I forget because at the time I didn't want to hear it. I looked up to him, being in a band and taking music courses.

Now, in the summer of 2010 he heard me play a guitar for the first time in over 10 years. He was shocked at how good I was, like "when did you learn how to do that?" then proceeded to tell me I was even better than him on one now.

And after losing my best friend and his moving away we've become closer. He even got my mom to buy him an Acoustic Bass for christmas so he can play with me when were together. I'd go jam with him more but he's over an hour away.

That could be the reason for me worrying about rejection.... if I get it from my own brother whom I looked up too so much.

And after playing with him now he says. "You're really good, but you lack the experiance of jammin".......... probly thanks to you mofo!!!!!!! lol

[QUOTE="Franklinstein"][QUOTE="ColdExistence"]I don't have that fear for some reason. There's always some one out there will like your stuff.

Mikey132

Want to hear a good story, too bad if answer is no, I'm typing it. I started to play when I was 13. My older brother who was 2 years older than me played in more than 1 band, (lol, I just found out at Christmas he played in a Faith No More tribute band.... shocking, I know)

Anyways in my teenage years I said to him one night "you know there's brothers in Collective Soul?" (at that time I was really looking forward to playing in a band) He said "Do you want to know why that will never happen?" The rest I forget because at the time I didn't want to hear it. I looked up to him, being in a band and taking music courses.

Now, in the summer of 2010 he heard me play a guitar for the first time in over 10 years. He was shocked at how good I was, like "when did you learn how to do that?" then proceeded to tell me I was even better than him on one now.

And after losing my best friend and his moving away we've become closer. He even got my mom to buy him an Acoustic Bass for christmas so he can play with me when were together. I'd go jam with him more but he's over an hour away.

That could be the reason for me worrying about rejection.... if I get it from my own brother whom I looked up too so much.

And after playing with him now he says. "You're really good, but you lack the experiance of jammin".......... probly thanks to you mofo!!!!!!! lol

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

[QUOTE="Franklinstein"] I agree Cold, @ Mikey. If you have friends that you can play music with, that is also very helpful because it takes some of the constant attention away from yourself, and instead you only have a third or a fourth of that attention focussed on you solely. Franklinstein

Want to hear a good story, too bad if answer is no, I'm typing it. I started to play when I was 13. My older brother who was 2 years older than me played in more than 1 band, (lol, I just found out at Christmas he played in a Faith No More tribute band.... shocking, I know)

Anyways in my teenage years I said to him one night "you know there's brothers in Collective Soul?" (at that time I was really looking forward to playing in a band) He said "Do you want to know why that will never happen?" The rest I forget because at the time I didn't want to hear it. I looked up to him, being in a band and taking music courses.

Now, in the summer of 2010 he heard me play a guitar for the first time in over 10 years. He was shocked at how good I was, like "when did you learn how to do that?" then proceeded to tell me I was even better than him on one now.

And after losing my best friend and his moving away we've become closer. He even got my mom to buy him an Acoustic Bass for christmas so he can play with me when were together. I'd go jam with him more but he's over an hour away.

That could be the reason for me worrying about rejection.... if I get it from my own brother whom I looked up too so much.

And after playing with him now he says. "You're really good, but you lack the experiance of jammin".......... probly thanks to you mofo!!!!!!! lol

I wish I've been playing for that long. I've been playing like 5 or 6 years. If I had 12 years of experience I could probably make something way better.

ColdExistence

Well... if you keep it up, you'll reach, and surpass, 12.... I know people who've been playing for longer than I've been alive (23 years).

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

Mikey132

[QUOTE="Mikey132"]

In this aspect of my life the fear of rejection has always been greater than the aspect of accomplisment. If I could kick a pansies ass for shaving his chest I should be able to say whatever I want without regard to what others think.

I'm a man with the world at my feet who's too scared to take a ******* step!

Nude_Dude

Being a musician (somewhat, I enjoy theory more than actually playing these days) I can appreciate your talent...however...imo the world does not need more metal. You should get into folk/jazz.DocDelicious

I don't like metal other than thrash metal but that was listenable. Mixing/mastering it better I think would have even more of an impact My issue is repetition, the guitar riff just doesn't deviate enough and the piano needs some variety I think. But hey it's better than my crap I'm trying to produce.shadowkiller11