"Who in their right mind would name their son Knife."
Actually, wrong. While it hasn't been made clear so far in the story, the naming convension of the Esters goes like this: The name ceremony is a rite of passage where a person comes of age and chooses a new name. Your birthname is just your parrents name (mom's name if you're a girl, dad's if you're a guy) with a couple letters added. So Sivia's mother is named Siv while Fiola and Fioli are daughters of Fiol (Norwegian word for Violet). Except from Fiola and Sivia, who are still underage (by less than one year) everyone in the army has picked their own names. As you might have picked up on, it is quite common to have names that are also common nouns.
So his parents didn't name him Knife. That said, if he had a son it would probably be named Knifer untill it grew up.
"Candidate U 37 is a much more likeable character than Extremely Whiny Sivia. Mainly because she's no longer whining. If you were to start a second draft with the story focusing on this arc, the tryout for the army would be a great starting place, and then you can do a bit of flashbacks here and there to Extremely Whiny Sivia (henceforth referred to as EWS)."
I wanted her past self to be properly established first. I would consider shortening part 2.2 for a second draft though.
"This is the second time you pointed out that Fiola has sizeable breasts and Sivia has a wasteland. But my right hand is currently too tired to appreciate any of that, so you lose this round."
Your right hand might enjoy part 5.13... Which is probably about hal a year away from translation. MO HA HA:twisted:
"I feel like I should feel sorry for Fiola for not making the cut. I kind of want to, actually, now that Candidate U 37 has appeared in the story and surpassed her in ability. Please toss in a few lines in the story where Fiola is frustrated, so I can feel frustrated with her."
Why would you assume its not already in the story. I mean, come on.
"Where are these recruits coming from? Also, the story hasn't really elaborated on what the Ester Army is doing there in...where are they? Land of the Ards? Neutral territory? Does this region, Sivia's homeland, have a name?"
So, my philosophy has been that some details you will pierce together yourself the more you read, but here is a quick explanation.
The Esters live in Estrana, with the capital Liseria and the holy city Esteria while the Ards live in Ardera, whose capital is Arderian. There is no neutral zone between them, unless you count the river of godsblood itself, which is surrounded by a wall on both sides. The training camp (named Vehaka as you'll later find out) is located not too far away from three different villages. It is also pretty close to the holy city while not being too far away from the trade road, so they can join up with the capital's forces if they decide to launch an offensive.
In other news, chapter 9 is up.
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