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#1 naju890_963
Member since 2008 • 8954 Posts

Hey guys, I recently wrote a retrospective for Gran Turismo.

 http://www.nizulo.com/2013/06/nizulo-retrospective-gran-turismo/

Thanks in advance!

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#2 BLaverock
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Thanks for the review :) I've only played the recent GT for PS3, so I've never known its history. Your article was good. Just keep an eye out for comma splices. 
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#3 -Saigo-
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I really hate comma splices, I see them far too often. ^_^
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#4 zyxe  Moderator
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I really enjoyed the intro and all of the information you gave, along with your personal take on how the changes to the various installments in the series affected fans as well as the company. My main critique is that you started off with a great intro and it was fairly formally written, then you start breaking down into more colloquial language the further you get into the piece, so it's almost like you got tired of organizing and editing and instead started to sort of freestyle it.
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#5 BLaverock
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Love your signature, by the way. In Flames is the best!
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#6 naju890_963
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Thanks for the feedback guys.

@Blave: \m/ Rock on!