Hey. This is Miguelrc481 here (mrc481 or Zagettrix if you prefer) with a few of my poetic works. By posting these here, I was hoping to receive some constructive criticism that might help me better my writing technique. These are mostly free verse works and I deal primarily with inputting pop culture references (minus Beyond, Inspirational World, and Where Shapes Meet Symbols. All the poems that I placed into this topic are not in order of creation (minus the first one which was the first serious poem I wrote). I hope you enjoy these works.
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---------- Dragon's Heart -----
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Beating with the heart of a dragon,
Never stopping, he always moved forward
Standing tall, no one could over look him
A burning fire that was unable to dim
The pain of loss, driven to darkness
The pain of victory, the loss of kindness
The once shining dragon rose from the ashes,
Now dull, darkened by sorrow and gashes
Three heads of a dragon, one heart couldn't survive
Broken apart to which only the dark could revive
He looks at his hands and asks what went wrong
Why did he get beaten, why did he lose for so long
He breaks into tears and he curses himself
For leaving those he loved and going after the wealth
The power had gotten to him, he knew he wanted more
The mayhem, the carnage, the destruction and gore
It lasted until the day in which he drew his last breath
At that point in time he realized what was coming was his death
He hurt those he loved, it led him to confess
He cried because he knew he was one to transgress
His heart began to slow as it inched closer to its last beat
With his final move he summoned that shining dragon to its feet
That dragon stood tall, a symbol of his courage and skill
He dropped to his knees like he had overdosed from a pill
As that dragon started to fade, so too did his heart
Knowing in his final moment he received a new start
He took his last breath as his eyes started to close
His friends watched on, their lives had hit new lows
Slowly time passed and he died as no one spoke
Tears fell without stop as all their hearts broke
He was remembered a hero, defeating darkness before he passed
He was remembered and loved, his skills are unsurpassed
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 ---------- Beyond -----
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Look beyond the soul
See time take its toll
It'll bleed because
That's what it does
A heart as black as coal
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 ---------- Where Shapes Meet Symbols -----
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A circle has end at the assumptions you make.
If you know the end of your explanation,
You're one of the erased.
Explain how to be built incorrectly.
Access the point P(5,-3), Q(-2,4), R(-1,7)
Find the triangle A(2,-2), C(0,4)
Find the vertex J(2,5), L(-2,-5)
The bisector of a circle given end.
If it is a given triangle where shapes meet symbols,
Then the end is near.
You will now be erased.
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---------- Inspirational World -----
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The greatest feeling is one held onto - yet not remembered.
Presented in the form of an alternative reality.
Slowly the day fades into night and we're shown this world.
Magical sights where the imagination runs free
And the restraints of life are released to grant hope renewed.
Even though we first saw each other – face to face.
We met before in the world of sleepless wonder.
Where seeing you has shown me things I could not have imagined.
For nearly a year I lay in this world without
Inspiration or guidance.
Yet you gave me the greatest gift of all…
And although this world disappears when your eyes open.
To me, this place remains
Because you make me…
Happy.
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 ---------- One Final Time -----
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It's a place most don't go,
The world that never was.
Two boys stand here now.
The one – has no emotions.
He is a nobody – his nobody.
Like a torn photograph,
Like a gentle melody.
He fights his other – to understand.
"Tell me why he chose you!"
The battle doesn't last long.
He falls, to his knees.
A nobody – that's what he is.
He was never meant to exist.
Now it's clear – he understands.
Looking up into his eyes,
He feels complete now with his answer.
"You make a good other."
The battle is over.
He disappears, and everything
Is absorbed into darkness, one final time.
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---------- Kenny Controls -----
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It's dark but he can see everything clearly.
A distant flame fades away.
He looks down and stares at a photograph,
It's his only memory.
It's light but he can't see anything at all,
Causing pain and destruction everywhere.
Not aware of the suffering he's caused,
It's his last memory.
When it's dark, he can see,
When it's light, he cannot.
"Will you help me? What is your name?"
It's too late.
"I knew it."
Angels scream and devils cry.
All this time, his heart bled,
From a hole in his chest,
That he created,
But never noticed.
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---------- Everlasting Dusk -----
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A forest, spilling life out from every branch,
The spirits sit here calling out to passing travelers.
Continue on past the mist and through the meadow,
Catch of glimpse of elegance hopping gently across the lake.
Take in new life as it inhales for the first time,
That sweet, unpolluted air that can heal your lungs.
Mythical creatures that not only stand out and amaze,
But also turn your seconds into minutes as you stare on.
A howl towards the moon will send the shivers through you,
Vines hang low and spread the feeling of personification, everlasting.
It's here where time doesn't matter, everything just exists.
Where you can hear the subtle marching of boars on their trail.
Reliving the unknown memories past onto you by the wind,
Spend some time here and enjoy the moment – frozen in time.
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---------- An Eternity In A Moment -----
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The clock's hands tick seconds away from the days to which we live,
Yet the strongest feelings of love flow through without harm.
The cherry blossoms fall elegantly from the looming tree branches,
Giving the calming impression of descending snow flakes.
A letter written to remind of a faithful bond between two,
Lost to the fierce wind during the journey through the night.
Arriving late due to delays caused by the severe snowstorm,
But there she sat anyway – cold and lonely, second seat from the right.
With the station closing – they head out toward the snow covered field,
Standing for what seemed like an eternity, reminiscing on times past.
The snow flakes fall gracefully from clouds obscured by the darkened sky,
Giving the peaceful impression of cherry blossoms falling soundlessly.
Restless eternities know of moments shared and moments lost,
Letting their story be past on to the gentle breeze – to be told another day.
Only sure that in a moment – with both of them turning,
That time be forgotten – love would have found its way home.
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- Zagettrix
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