Anyone here know a thing or two about poetry? (input needed)

So yeah. I'd particularly appreciate any female input as the recipient is female.

Basically I've ****ed up with my ex. I want her back. I believe this is achievable (albeit it's going to take more than a poem, But it shows I'm serious, right?...). I want to see what you lot make of it first. Too soppy? Plain crap? Most amazing thing you've read? Any input is appreciated. Thanks. (worth mentioning I hate poetry. It doesn't interest me at all. So it is probably rubbish lol):

Through all the years.

With all the loneliness and tears.

In my head is darkness, my own little tomb.

Knowing nothing more, other than doom and gloom.

When suddenly, the brightest light appeared.

I've never seen such a thing before, is it to be feared?

My eyes finally adjust to see such beauty. The gem of all gems, worth so much more than a mere ruby.

It's an entity no eyes deserve to see.

But for some reason it decides to show itself to me.

It has skin that would make a starlit sky look bleak.

A personality that would make any man weak.

A voice cries out "Go ahead, Mark. It's yours for the taking!".

But being scared and wary I panic. Setting my demise in the making.

It all starts to crumble.

Everything turns sour.

Perhaps I should have been more humble

But no. I push myself towards the final hour.

"What a fool you are! You've blew it now!" I say.

As I look for help, to take this despair away.

"You blew the most amazing thing you'll ever have." I sigh.

A tear appears at the blink of an eye.

We're in the 21st century. Screw the poetry. If you messed up then go talk to her in person like a man. If that fails then move on and stop wasting your time... and hers.

Iggy makes good poetry. Tweet her.

Dem bars, yo.

If your goal is to sway her with a dramatic poem, finish it that way.

@maddog281: If the poem is sincere and is truly referencing events from your life and how you felt when you met her, then I'd say go for it. It may be a bit awkward, but I don't think anything really bad will come of it. It will probably be helpful.

or you can make the poem shorter and just say "I'll make it up to you, I'll do whatever it take/ you know I love you like the fat kid love cake".

@maddog281: "I'd particularly appreciate any female input"

In that case

I'm female...but we females are not all the same. I can say this though. If you and her have communicated via poetry before and that is how you actually feel, then go for it.
However, I think the best thing you can do is just say..."I ****ed up....but I love you and I want to make things right".

Me and my now husband had a major breakup back in 2012 over him lying about bills. He thought I was angry over the bills, but I was angry about the lying. Instead of talking we just got angrier at each other. Eventually he came to me and said those words and they were the most romantic I have ever heard. lol I also wanted to make things right. We ending up working things out, even though the debt rabbit hole was deep.
Just be real. If poetry or letters are how you two communicate feelings (some do) go for it. If not, just be straight with her.